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This is genuinely one of the best short stories i’ve read in a minute, really kept me on my toes

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A story written by a true nosferatu head, loved the thrall dynamic- the tease of real mythicism and the life draining realistic twist of Rodney's everywhere

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Mysticism* typing on mobile hurts

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Mysticism?? That’s so cool! I caught the vampire leitmotif, but I must have missed the mysticism angle completely (my bad, I’ve been out of it lately 😅🤪🤓)—please, do tell!

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I was more so pointing to mysticism as simply the magical or otherworldly not necessarily a reference 🫡

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Oh word, I can dig that!! Yeah you could certainly lump vampires & the occult into one neat little package. I’ve also been thinking about AI, as well, like… what if they’re secretly the ringleaders & we’re all clueless as to who our true masters are?? 🤫 Perhaps they’ve been scapegoating themselves so as to pull off the heist of the millennial, and the performative hate toward the machine is simply an elaborate ruse. A bit, if you will. Fully committed, albeit to an eerie extent. One thing I’ve learned from studying the occult is that it’s very easy to commit too hard to a bit & totally derail the whole game (improvisational comedy)—the key is “yes AND/OR/BUT”, as simply saying “NO that’s RETARDED” ruins the fun (NOT in a bad way; as in “retardando” in musical theory: slowing the melody down so much that it facilitates radical change in the whole tune, you dig?).

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I've never thought about bringing AI into the conversation of the occult but that's some interesting food for thought

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this was hilarious lmao. charlotte such a queen i wish i had it in me to call men out to their face like that

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Jan 5Edited

Her mouth QUIRKED UP. I’m loving this so far. EDIT: just finished. Tons of fun. Thank you so much for sharing!

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“Rodney, you’re the only one sucking the life force out of anyone here”

I see what you did there)

Fun read!

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Charlotte would fix me

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Nice work! This is a fun read and kept me engaged through out. As someone from NY who lived in LA for a period of time, you captured the nuance so well.

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I liked it! Charlotte tore into Rodney but now how you’d expect. She don’t get him physically. She got him mentally.

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This was a fantastic read! Great work here!

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Loved this story!

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This is so good, Lolo! Your descriptions, pacing, and characters are rich and emotive. Like every sentence in the story feels necessary, you never lose focus. I really like the uneasy tone throughout too.

I think maybe your protagonist is a self-insert bc I've seen some of your tweets lol, but I really enjoyed him especially how you described his anxiety. And it's so fun that the "vampire" character tells the protagonist that he's draining. Funny irony.

I hope you keep writing fiction! You're very good!

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a big hell yeah to bringing short fiction on here

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I enjoyed this thoroughly, especially because I live in Los Feliz & frequently visit Silverlake - also thank you for Charlotte. It was a fun and edgy ✨

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A proper fun read! Thank you for sharing.

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I really enjoyed this piece, and loved the ending. Felt empowered by Charlotte, especially after a date where the man talked about himself the entire time. There are vampires all around!

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I was witness to each moment. Thanks for writing this!

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